It's a post on an online fourm the fact you two are arguing this way over a video game is a joke. Lay off each other and enjoy yourselves. Seriously do you guys enjoy the drama? Video games are meant to RELIEVE stress and take a load off your shoulders and put a smile on your face. Just for once...
It flows well and it is understandable. I'd give you a solid 9/10 the only big things are your transition words such as because and going to. However, they are just little words that aren't really needed unless you're going to be writing long papers! So congratulations on your score, and the...
And with that drama season is officially over and marching season begins!! Now that I've got some free time for a month or so looks like I'm back full time ;)